Aw. Wow. This was so sweet. It's sad, though. Obviously, because it's about a lost love. But it's beautifully written, that's for sure.

I cannot find anything I would change, or anything that I dislike about this.

Wonderful job.

5/5

-Briana

That was very sweet and touching. it shows the soft side of a boys heart.
i had a few stumbling s at odd places but those just added character.
this could use a bit of re-vocabularianism. stronger wording and more emotion would make this perfection.
good job!

Lexie

Wow, this poem was excellent. but, it lacks word-choice. it was pretty simple for me.. it flowed nice though.. so I guess I wouldn't change it too much. just pick up a thesarus and change a few words and make them more interesting I guess.... other than that, i think you did a good job. emotions were kind of there, but not extremely out there. maybe work with that as well. I guess I agree mostly with what blond genius said.. it is a okay poem, but it could be stronger! i know you can do it, im sure you have the potential. great work tho, 5/5

This was pretty sweet. I liked the imagery you created with lines such as:

"Remember when I kissed your forehead
And you drifted off to sleep?"

^^ It's like flashbacks into a beautiful relationship, one not ready to be forgotten. However, I didn't like the repetition of some lines, especially the ones at the beginning. Over-done repetition kind of gives off the impression that the writer can't come up with anything else to say - a bad thing. I'm not saying this is you, but I'm saying this is what certain kinds of repetition implies. Just be careful.

It was a sweet poem, which I did enjoy.

It is such a heart touching. It touch my sould
good job,

Good write, loved the emotion. I have a new poem posted finally...Read an comment would be appreciated!