In the last few lines, it should be 'meant' and 'to', not 'mend' and 'too'. This poem is filled with conflict, and I think that really makes your poem real. It rhymes, but not conspicuously, which makes it much easier to read than poems where the rhyme is forced.

good poem, i got wrapped up in it.

This is so kool, it dont matter if its wrong grammer, as long as it is kool to you, that f@g @ss Sean Allen dont no anything of real poetry. All poetry comes from the heart is beauty, remember that.

oh well;....i read some of ur poems, i liked this the most... it was gr8, you've got talent...keep up this good work!!
by the way, thnx for readin my poem and commenting :-D i appreciate it..

take care.... bye byezz
stephanie.h