by Katie Jun 28, 2008
category :
Sadness, depression /
about death
Glass is broken on the ground |
Lovely poem. A few punctuation mistakes, but those are easily cured. The first stanza does a wonderful job of capturing the reader. The flow is a little rough, but not so much as to make me want to stop reading. Congrats on being the creator of the first well-written poem I've read here (and no, this was not the first poem I've read on this site; it was the 4th). Keep up the good work. |