Make A Wish {Contest}

by BREEawNUHH   Jun 28, 2008


I've finally made my wish,
just like you said.
You told me it'll come true,
then kissed my forehead.

I've made this special wish,
and I made it just for you.
You told me that you loved me,
and I told you I loved you, too.

I've made this silly little wish,
because you said that I should.
You told me I just had to believe,
and that you'd make sure I would.

I've made this important wish,
and I hope that you see.
The wish that I've made,
is for you to come back to me.

I made that stupid wish,
a long time ago.
I don't care anymore,
because you've sunk too low.

It's okay that you've left,
I'll be just fine without you.
I've met someone else,
who've made all my wishes come true.

Briana Coulter
06/28/08

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  • 16 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    Wow, this poem was amazingly beautiful and wonderful. The rhyme was great; it helped with such a smooth flow. This poem was kind of cool because the poem kind of began with a extremely happy note and then when you said that this guy and you were no longer together or something [I don't remember the exact words!] But, that kind of turned the mood a slight bit, but when you said that you had moved on and that you would find someone else.. [again, I don't remember exact wording, lol].. It set a happy thought yet again, for the reader.. Well done. Great write. 5/5.

  • 16 years ago

    by Blueleo

    Interesting view of ones fight with conciousness and own heart. Fighting, almost regretting, the desperate state once reached. Then again, questioning the fact that it may have been even real. Would you have made that choice if it was out of your free will. Finally, ending it with having the power to say that the time has passed for such a fight and it is now time to enjoy the present. Another rare poem with a rare outlook. I liked this one also.

  • 16 years ago

    by Michelle18

    Oh wow.

    i love this poem.. i loved the suspense... i was reading it and i was like ok whats the dang wish lol.. i thought it was great.

    and the ending blew me away. i so did not expect it.

    great job. 5/5

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