Wow, this was excellent. whoever gave you a 3, something is wrong with them. :] b/c i saw no flaws or anything in this poem. i loved the excellent rhyming and how all the words together just made sense.. you had some excellent word choice. i use excellent alot. hmm.. excellent! :]] 5/5

Oh! I quite liked it. I normally get annoyed by continuous rhymes, because most people can't get away with it, but you actually did quite a nice job. Though nearing the end, it kind of bothered me because it seemed like you were trying hard to fit i right, but it works. And the continuous rhyme made me laugh. I find it amusing :)

I normally pick out lines to interpret or favourite parts of the piece, but all that "-tion" has made my brain go all wooey. So I'll just leave it at: That was freakin' awesome.

..__MiNDYY

Haha, that was hot, i loved the low of words, its not the first time i saw u did that i ur pieces. very nice piece. id love for u to check mine out, lemme see what you think...

peace

Haha! I love how every single line ending ended with the same sound! Its unique and it adds some of you into it:) Great job 5/5