Two Lovers.

by Courageous Dreamer   Jun 29, 2008


*-Written for a contest-*

In the mist of the night,
Two lovers walk along the beach.
As they continue to walk,
The sand caresses their feet.

It's just the two of them,
Spending an enchanting evening in each other's arms.
Hoping to never let go -
of the perpetual love they share.

As the sweet whispers of the waves,
Send shivers up their spines...
The ocean remains persistent -
up-and-down, up-and-down.

As they apotheosize the beautiful horizon,
They exchange passionate kisses.
It is then that the ceaseless affection proliferates -
amidst the two souls like never before...

Like the rising tide, beating hearts grow but never die.

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Last line, Credited to Arteyu.

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  • 15 years ago

    by PoetryKnight

    Sweet action, hope it won. a 5/5 poem indeed! sweetatious!
    PoetryKnight
    aka
    Aaron

  • 16 years ago

    by Hollymariee

    Up-and-down, up-and-down.
    The only suggestion i have is to change the second up and down .. And I don't understand the "-" . Perhaps to something like
    Up , and down . Up , and back down again .
    Otherwise , I like it . The words flow nicely .. And the imagery is creative . Very good job , and I've never seen a 5/5 out of 21 votes before .

  • 16 years ago

    by Austin

    Another poem of yours I thought was pretty good. I think you would do well fitting rhymes into your poems if you tried. I'd like to see something like that from you, if you're ever interested. Very nice.

  • 16 years ago

    by Love Fallacy

    I really like the last line "Like the rising tide, beating hearts grow but never die."

    I love word play and that last line is great. Excellent job, 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by khobo

    Very sweet and pleasant. Brings a smile upon my face. Very nice work. Loved this one.

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