Need to edit it a bit more but this was really deep, the repetitiveness really allowed this poem to flow and assert its point across all that more effectively. great job.

keep writing, because practice makes perfect and your poems have been continually getting better. well done.

5/5 David

This was... well... brilliant. I wasn't expecting this, and I was pleasantly surprised. It honestly was like an ongoing battle within yourself, and you displayed that perfectly. Excellent. :] A unique idea and well expressed.