Comments : That Someone

  • 16 years ago

    by The Apathetic Emo

    I can entirely and completely relate to this poem. It's decently written and portrays your emotions very well; the fact that it reminds me of myself strengthens that emotion. I love how the very last stanza of the poem is only three lines long and rhyming, making it stand out and stick in the reader's mind. The rest of the poem is filled with rhymes (both true and false rhymes) that are scattered and are in no set place/pattern, but it doesn't hinder the reading of the poem at all. It actually has a surprisingly smooth flow. The lines "Somehow...
    I won't doubt I'm that shallow.
    Just like...
    I won't doubt I loved that someone" don't flow as well, but they aren't bad and they make the reader pause for a second and think about the meanings behind the words.

    Great write. Thanks for the read.