It started out well and with good rythem and turned into a stream of consciousness towards the end. It was a bit awkard, but when I finished I realized it gave it a more realistic twist. Comming more from the heart then the words. I liked it.

BRAVO! *clap* that was wonderful. i love this poem how it started and ended. i liked how you wrote : ' its like your carved in my brain and everywhere i turn i see your face ' that was wonderful.