Because HE Took you Away

by WiltingWallFlower   Jun 29, 2008


Lost in the moment
Caught in a kiss
I never thought
I could feel like this

Words can't describe
Anything I feel
Suddenly I question
Can this be real?

Three words linger
Hanging in the air
Just three words
To show I care.

We were so happy
Just you and I
Now it's ended
And I only ask, "Why?"

I've said all the words
Now I'm on my knees
Wishing you'd say something
I'm begging you please.

Staring at a stone
Rain falling on my head
I can't help but think
It should've been me instead.

So i need to know if this poem is clear enough to where you get the main story or if i need to clear it up some. I REALLY REALLY REALLY need feedback on this one and please be brutally honest with me.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Jayke

    I think it flows well, to me it sounded like you and a guy were in love but something bad happened to the guy, and now you morn over the loss, but thats just my opinion ^^, good luck keep writeing

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