Broken heart

I thought this poem was very strong. I liked that you got your emotions deeply into it. I think though perhaps you should make your phrases have the same rhythm. But keep up the good work, you have quite a talent.
<3raych

thanks for commenting :)

Fast directly to the point ,

i lvoe that kind and it rhyme ,

if you hve more then these, you are ont eh way to my favporite list:)
you ahve my perfect vote

Aawwww.......thats a strong and Very sweet poem and written excellently i realy love ir , so cute and full of true deep feelings and emotions and the words were so sweet =] great poem !! keep up the good work =] 5/5

Had a couple of places that I had to reread to grasp, but other then that, I like it. Short and simple and straight to the point. A sudden burst of emotion that dies slowly, that's beautiful.