Devoured life
by Mr. Darcy Jun 30, 2008
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Psychosis erodes my fragile rest, |
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16 years ago
by Aish
That was really good!
Clever how each line rhymed, and that you found all the words that really worked without it seeming like you were grasping for them.
Really dark but vivid! the imagery is fantastic
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16 years ago
Wow antrust me i dont say wow much but you ued all your words nicly mny people dont know how to do that 5/5
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16 years ago
by S R P
This was an excellent poem, I very much enjoyed the emotions that were portrayed through the piece.
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16 years ago
by Lonely Rider
" feel their talons claw open my chest,
Exposing my life, so cruelly suppressed. "
^^this is so dark.... and so well written...
"Psychosis erodes my fragile rest,
Whilst demons vomit their evil finesse. "
^^wonderful word choice...
"evil finesse" -- interesting term
excellent write...
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16 years ago
by Blueleo
It was a very nice piece as all your work is. It was a little harsh on my eyes, but if my eyes had witnessed what they had not seen then I believe the words delivered the emotions superbly. 5/5 without a question.
