Our Thriving Hearts Will Live For Us When We Forget to Breathe

by BrokenREALiTy   Jun 30, 2008


Distant rhymes embrace my cries,
for oceans can only part us physically.
(So hold hands with my voice for now)
and we'll make up for a lifetime of love,
above the clouds as they rain our sorrows for us.

"Leave crying to the heavens, love,
for your eyes are meant to whisper to my lips,
not shed the tears designed for lovers lost.
[Does it look like we need any help,
when we've already found each other?"]

And I swear to you, I'll reach for us tonight,
with my loving thoughts, I'll kiss your tender dreams.
We'll run amongst the stars in concert,
as we taste the soft caress of gentle streams,
seeping through the fogs that light our way.
©20080626 Mindy Huang

** Another One AM piece. The title wasn't random, and the piece actually means something to me, as opposed to the majority of my writes... Dedicated to an old love that lives (lived) in England, whose name I can't even remember anymore; the first love piece I think I've written that isn't about loss...

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  • 16 years ago

    by S R P

    I loved this poem. I was looking at your profile before I read the poem, and thought to myself "Most poems that have no rhyme usually do not appeal to me." I tried to view this one with a completely open mind, and I must say, I found it absolutely amazing.. My favourite part:

    "Leave crying to the heavens, love,
    for your eyes are meant to whisper to my lips,
    not shed the tears designed for lovers lost.

    I loved it. You have an amazing talent.

  • 16 years ago

    by Bugg

    "And I swear to you, I'll reach for us tonight,"

    I love that line. Really. I don't really like love poems because most of them are superficial and completely drained of emotions [except for love, but I hope you understand what I'm talking about!!] (even though I have some...), but this one was really good. I hope I didn't confuse you too much or sound like a bumbling idiot. That's just what I need. :P

    ~Kail

  • 16 years ago

    by maggie

    This is a really good piece
    keep up the good work
    and as for your repressed memory.
    its better to have loved than never loved at all
    even if you cant remember his name. (:

  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    Okay wow beautiful title. True attention graber.

    1st Stanza:
    "So hold hands with my voice for now"
    ^That is so unique and a lot of people would be scared to try something new but you made it work. So much meaning was packed behind that line that I was left in awe. Every word in this stanza had a place and everything was carefully thought out which is good to see.

    2nd Stanza:
    This stanza was so beautiful and full of love! If this was said by a boy then wow thats amazing because I didnt know there were guys like that out there in this world. The emotions felt real and nothing seemed forced which had me feeling for this couple.

    3rd Stanza:
    Okay the imagery her just blew me away! WOW. I'm left breathless. This was an amazing way to end this beautiful piece and I love that you ended it on a happy note because I finished reading with a smile. Beautiful emotion expressed with your flawless choice of words.

    I adored this piece hun well done.
    *5/5*

  • 16 years ago

    by FlawlesslyTarnished

    This piece was very beautifully written. And the wayy you worded it was outstanding. I understand/get the piece so well. And I'm amazed at it's excellence. One of the best pieces I've ever read :] 5/5

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