This poem was great. to tell you the truth, like i usually get images in my head about peoples poems but this one i didn't till the end, i don't know i guess i couldnt fellow it well or something but i did think this was good, what i got out of it after i read the last line was i think that this person waited for him to be there and when he finally was, they were finally over, i don't know if thats what or how you wrote it but thats what i got out of it. but again it was a great poem.

keep it up.
keep on writing.
love always and forever.

Loved the ending. Its a lovely free verse. I enjoyed the descriptive quality. tc

The lack of punctuation made this a bit hard for me to follow; I ended one line expecting it to be one complete thought, and then i was confused by the next one being an extension, or just the second part. I didn't see a particular form here. Perhaps the 10-line stanza should have caught me on, but there was no sort or rhyme scheme, or punctuation to help me with the flow. Another thought that hit me was that you could possibly split up the stanzas to make them smaller, and thus easier to read.

All in all, it wasn't bad. The story had meaning, and I think it was just lost in too many lines squished together. Keep writing though, we all have room to get better