Comments : Your Angel

  • 16 years ago

    by Savannah Kate

    Haha thank you very much!

  • 16 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    It was a very beautiful poem. I really love two lines in your poem.

    For this miracle you gave to me
    - Miracle = To be with your angel (Nice line)

    To make his heart so beautiful
    - Great description! beautiful it is.

    The meaning of the poem was very good, I think to improve this you should work on the flow of it. Some lines line like:

    Never thought id end up with him
    don't deserve, why cant he see
    - It doesn't flow well for me.

    Anyway another suggestion I would like to give is.. I think to improve the poem more you should add more 'deep/strong' words in it. It will be more interesting to read it.

    Anyway, I was really touched in this poem. I too believe in angels! Keep up the good work.

    Thanks for reading my poem.

  • 16 years ago

    by The Prince

    This is a beautiful poem, and thank you for the comment on mine, I loved the reference to angels =]]