It was a very beautiful poem. I really love two lines in your poem.
For this miracle you gave to me
- Miracle = To be with your angel (Nice line)
To make his heart so beautiful
- Great description! beautiful it is.
The meaning of the poem was very good, I think to improve this you should work on the flow of it. Some lines line like:
Never thought id end up with him
don't deserve, why cant he see
- It doesn't flow well for me.
Anyway another suggestion I would like to give is.. I think to improve the poem more you should add more 'deep/strong' words in it. It will be more interesting to read it.
Anyway, I was really touched in this poem. I too believe in angels! Keep up the good work.
Thanks for reading my poem.
16 years ago
by The Prince
This is a beautiful poem, and thank you for the comment on mine, I loved the reference to angels =]]