The way you worded this was very well thought out and helped it along a lot. Your style has a little less structure, but the way you word it and the expressions and ideas used are executed skillfully and pick up the slack, so to speak

Its a good poem and I suggest u to bring a rhyming quality in ur poem. overal its good.

This poem was fantastic. it was beautiful and honest and quite pure. i can relate to this one.
job well done. 5/5.

-Ashlei.

The last lines stuck the most, ending the poem perfectly.

Beautiful write!