Stab in the Back

Nice job, good ryme!

"Degraded heart , passing beside me ,
feeling SO low and cutting inside
smiling in public so no one can see
what this wave of feeling have brought with the tide"

^^ First -- no space after "heart" or "me".

"look in a glance in the past and understand
the trail of broken footprint on the sands of life
where i hold you all the path with my two hands
and then after you strike me with the sharpest knife"

^^ "footprint" should be "footprints". I's should be capitalized.

"and now i stand on the beach of sands,
holding my heart in both hands
and look at you go, and walk away
with no heart to hate , no words to say"

^^ I's should be capitalized. Fourth line -- no space after "hate".

Overall; it was good. I liked it a lot. :]

5/5

-Briana

Wonderful work. You have my vote and i hope i have yours!

~Chinwe~
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Well, you sir, are harboring some serious talent. I think it all seems natural, like the words just flow and make perfect sense. It expresses it well. YOU express it well.
Keep it up.[:
-Krystal

WOW thats a powerful poem
Good work!!!