Hay darling,
This poem was so sad and deep
but very well written.
2 minor things I picked up which may improve your poem was in the 2nd line you said loneliness and
careless,
but I think it may flow better if you say
carelessness.
and where you say away from people by my own.
An idea could be to say away from
people on my own.
but those are just suggestions.
Aside from that I absolutely loved it,
your words were so
powerful
and really hit the reader hard.
They portray such painful
details of the loneliness, hurt, pain and despair
that you face. Great job.

love
shellaine

Mashallah ur truly amazing and i'm glad i found u

I have had the same feelings too sometimes before but not to the degree where i want to hurt myself.
anyway, i really know how you feel but what i have discovered is most people are selfish, no one will care about you unless you show yourself to them, don't wait for them because they won't come. rather than that try to be strong, life is heartless so don't lose yourself to it. grab your weakness and change it to strength.

and remember, there is always someone care at least one...i care about you :)

Excellent poem Heba. I will be with you forever and always, no matter how far we are from each other.... don't worry happiness is on it's way to you.

Mmm nice girl its totally how i feel

I won't say that ur poem touched me or it's beautifully written...But I feel like u r speaking for many broken hearts ...U said the words that r inside me..

I am always thinking about death
About cutting my breath
To be away from this torture

No one feels me
No one cares about me
No one understands me

This part is really wonderful...U got a talent..
I added this poem to my favorites.

I really feel alot of the words... about being alone and no one understanding. Its hard so be strong!

"I am nothing, I have no existence
Am far away from whom I love
And I can't bare this distance"

This quote is very beautiful, i like this poem a lot because it is very real. i feel what you are feeling, i can pick up the vibe and i really really dug it alot. keep up the great work man. 5/5

It's a sad sarcastic poem,but don't forget u never alone .... God is always with u and it might give u enough trust in Him not 2think of such horrible things..God always test us with tragedies and dramas but never give us more than we can bear my dear muslimah ! Be strong ;)

Omg, this was so, SO very sad. But very untrue Heba!lol and I speak for all of us when I say we all love you on this thing. Excellent piece! 5/5

So well depicted, as if you gave words to my thoughts, definitely one of my favorites. (but please don't be so upset, life's full of a thousand colours, just have to find them) be happy.

VERY NICE POEM HAVING A VERY DEEP SENSATION OF SADNESS.

..deep feelings..its nice to get out wats inside like that in words..wish u feel better just after writing these poems..it's a kinda relief..but dont give up to ur depression..gods there..hav hope always..

A really good variety of techniques all within this one poem. very raw and emotional! its sad but still very moving.

5/5
xx

Hi there! Actually I like this poem, yet I completely AGREE with our sister SOSO..
5/5

Oh wow, this is really good. you put a lot of emotion into it. i really enjoyed reading this.

btw, thanks for the comment on my poem. =3