I would keep this one
the innocence is priceless

Wow, great poem!!!

It is difficutl to see these happy feeligns in a series of sad poems , it dont need change , i am very setistyed with it the feelings are very clear
good work

Lol, 5th grade? So you were talented then and still are.
None the less this is a simple and as they would say cute poem. Very nice!

I liked this. It's short, simple, and to the point. Also, I like the innocence, but then again, you wrote it in the 5ft grade. Haha. Really though, it's cute. :] 5/5

-Briana

I like this one...good flow..but I would love to see more variety. But thats your creativity and thats awesome bcuz you put your own heart into it. So i'll give you a 5 for it:)

Very simple but oh so Fab!

Veryy good.

Take Care x

Very nice..
its very strong to show your love
for that person.
nice write,,
keep it up!