I liked this. It's sad, but I liked the truthfulness [I think that's a word, haha] behind it.

I'm gonna take it apart to critique properly.

"The pain of sorrow, the fear of falling
the stress of the world is on my back
no one to help me, i feel like bailing
the strength to keep it up is what i lack"

^^ First, I see that you're rhyming here. Personally, I think "falling" should be "failing", because it rhymes with "bailing". Also, I'm a grammar freak, so I, of course, will point out the capitalization errors.

"i need someone to help me lift the pain
but there is no one there to be my net
so i fall tot he ground and now I'm slain
the pressure was too much for me to get"

^^ I loved the rhyming here. I thought they were really good. The third line -- "..i fall tot he..", I think, should be "I fall to the.."

"it broke my back and made me feel much hurt
the pain cost me more than the love was worth
this kind of pain was much like eating dirt
so now i sit and cry by my fire's hearth"

^^ The repetition of the word "pain" bothers me a bit. However, this was my favourite part of the piece. I feel as though it shows more of what the writer is feeling.

"i think of the actions that got me here
and i wish that they weren't my biggest fear"

^^ I really enjoyed the ending. I think it was a perfect ending to a good poem.

Overall; 5/5

-Briana

The poem expresses many familiar emotions

the flow was great and i can relate

well written

This is great only one thing...

so i fall tot he ground and now I'm slain

should be:

so i fall to the ground...

other than that great piece I would love to see it in stanzas though, I liked you title too simple which is nice... you should try making you poems look a bit cleaner... capitalize, and use punctuation. This would make your poems look more apealing to the eyes and you'll find more poeple reading you work... atleast I did

"I think of the actions that got me here,
And I wish that they weren't my biggest fear. "

^^ so many times I used to feel like this... wishing some of the things in life weren't my biggest fears... so very true... I guess many people would be able to relate to that...

At some point of life most of us feel what you have described in your poem...
well written...
keep writing..

Itsh Okaii .. Tha Uvrs Aree Bettr Thow..=D

Mmm good expression and i could relate to waht you said , but i beleve no one can help you fi the pain , but i know i would help you by carying it with you , and nto fit it to you.

must sad things i get form your poems, but i will keep reading them

A sad and yet so painfully depicting your every emotion as though strapped and bounded within torments and tears and yet as you look around nothing and no one remains. I like your expressive writing because it draws the reader to feel exactly what you are feeling and I think that you have alot of talent. Keep it up! 5/5 from me.

Yes pain is indeed a great fear. A short and sweet read, not much to comment on.

I think that this piece is kind of unorganized.. but for the most part I like it. Great work

It's very emotional. Well written. But it could have been better. The structure of the poem is not that strong.