Fireworkss

Thank you for the comment. it wasnt my best beecause it was off the top of my head,, the memory of that night was true but vague.

This was a short poem but I enjoyed it very much many will be able to relate to this for sure.

"That night you looked me in the eyes,
I saw fireworks shot up in the sky,
And the spark was blinding,
That shine in your eyes,
Showed me you cared."

This first stanza was good the flow was good. And I can see whats going on. I can actually feel everything that is going on in this stanza as if it was really happening to me. I'm sure many others will feel this way once they read this poem.

"And the night,
You said you loved me,
I melted in your arms,
I felt you catch me,
And just hold me,
Hold me like you cared,
Thank you. "

Great second stanza, the build up to it was good. And the emotions were true good poem. keep it up.