I like it. It's really good. Kinda confusing. But maybe that's because I haven't slept in a few days, but either way, I still think it was really good. :]
Always,
Grace.

Well, I was never too big on typing comments out, but I just wanted to let you know that I read it and I liked it. Keep it up.

Overall Rating: 5.5/6 (specialrating)

Wow. lol that is all I have to say. Once again, your word choice was very unique and enjoyable to read.

Burn, watching you dance eases my eyes,
and thoughts evanesce,
like water seduced by a flame.

^^Gosh that is intense. And the best part about it was, that not only could you feel the intensity within this stanza, you could feel it throughout the whole entire poem. Which is a great quality to have in a poem.....consistency. Wow this was so great and like your other poem, It kept me thinking after words. Great write! You are very talented!