"where you stalking me?"
-did you mean to say were?

"specially when its your own blood relative?"
-it's especially not specially :D

wow. this was really good. it was full of saddness.. for sure. it was a good write, i don't really think there was much wrong with it. maybe you should just post the story [at least summerize it] at the bottom of the poem so we know the whole story instead of just having them PM you.. b/c im sure it would interest everyone. :) nice write 5/5

Wow this is really good.. i liked it.. it was so sad.. i was very interested in this poem.. and im glad that you took the time to write this poem about that little girl. its nice to so someone has a heart.

i love it. 5/5

Amazing work... I was so engrossed in it from the first line... wonderfully told.. the sadness... the remorse of the girl could be felt...

wonderful write...

Wow, it literally took my breath away, I briefly heard about said happening, but I do not know much of the details. I can really tell that you feel strongly about it, and thats just amazing. seriously, amazing job.

This poem is really nicely written and it has a very nice flow to it, so sad how sick people are and how they could ever think of these things let alone do them. great job 5/5 GG23

Aw. This is so sad, so emotional, and so heartfelt. I loved it. I don't see how someone could do this to a relative. It truly sickens me.

"maybe if I scream loud enough they can hear.
I want my mom, I want her to tell me I'm ok.
that everything will be alright, that I won't get hurt.
but I'm laying here in the ground underneath things.
they won't find me in time, I'm running out air."

^^ This is my favourite part of the poem. I feel like it gives more of a look into what the victim is thinking.

This is a wonderful piece. 5/5

``Briana