Passing Away with Time

by InvisiblyHeartless   Jul 3, 2008


Why did I even try to join in
To be helpful and supportive
It turns out that it's not fair
Family's are not supposed to
Destroy each other or its miserable
What happened to trust
Or honor and courtesy and belief
Where did passion go when
It's needed to save so many
I may make you mad at me
But right now yall make me sick
Taking me in and trying to care
With so much drama going on
And now I'm more ripped
Than I ever have been before
I love you all so much so soon
Tell me it's OK and we will survive
This tragic and dramatic crap
We need each other and we
Must stick together and love
One another to survive the worst
Get over it all and be friends again
For the sake of everyone around
I may seem selfish but so do you
Let's move on with out lives
Please.

*this amy piss some people off. i don't care i wanted to vent. So i did. Get mad and hate me idc any more. Just put in the past and get over it. and i wiill and so will the other people who did nothing wrong*

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  • 16 years ago

    by Sungrl And Mrs Whatsit

    This organic rant evoked images in me of a heartfelt communication call, delivered while standing on top of a very high mountain; a heartfelt call from one individual out to the entire human race......

    PS. "or its (it's) miserable"

  • 16 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    Hmm, I'm not sure how I feel about this one. You didn't really have any nice poetic descriptions that I feel could have made this piece beautiful. Everything was just kind of said in a straight-to-the-point and blunt kind of manner. Also, I think if you were to put punctuation into your work, it would help with the flow a lot. Right now it's just one big stanza with no breaks, no commas to tell us when to take a breath, so it's like one big run-on sentence.

    Sorry, dear. I just feel this could have been a lot better.

  • 16 years ago

    by FlawlesslyTarnished

    I like this piece. You express yourself very well through the words you chose to describe it. You make a lot of good points and this was a very relateable piece. And it's always good to vent, esepcially through poetry :] 5/5.

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