by Blissful
Okay first off the thing I noticed is your repitition of reason. I get where you were going but it seemed too much you know? You know how much I love the quote so I know where you're coming from. I liked the stanza where you were like you break up and its for a reason so on and so fort. That was repetive for me. I think the ending can be improved and I felt like it was too short...you could add soooo much to it and I know you got the potential to take it to the other level. Its up to you if you want to because its okay like this too but I see soo much more potential. Anyway I did enjoy the piece dont me more, I enjoyed it so much that I wanted more! You still deserve a *5/5* Well done :] |
by BREEawNUHH
" "Everything happens for a reason." |
by Lonely Rider
Brilliant write.. and so very true... each line reflects the truth of life... |
Hmm, right, okay. First of all, these two stanzas - |
I like this piece alot. And I like the meaning behind this piece. It was very well written. And worded very beautifully. You're ideas were organized very well. But I'm not a strong believer in that quote. I use to be, but then things change. But that last stanza was almost convincing, the way you worded it was pretty, deep. [I dunno how else to describe it] lol anyway 5/5. :] |
No other way of expressing that,, good job! |
"Everything happens for a reason." |
by HolyDiver
I think everyone who commented b4 got it perfectly |
by Mohamed
Dude.. |
by Sugar
Their comments were too much...^^ |
by H E Losey
Enjoyed the entire write except for the fourth stanza, it seemed to lose the metre of the work. |