Stars

Thank you Gabby, hey, did I fix those errors?

This was beautiful, first of all. There are a few errors ((and i'll show ya where, patience)). But overall, this was a lovely way to praise Him who saved us..<3

Light in darkness,
Beautiful and great,
Preventing the complete triumph of hopelessness,
And death;

^^ This was a very pretty start. Every time you look at the stars, you ((and every believer)) can be reminded of how much He loves us, how great His glory is...just how HUGE our God is...we can't possibley understand in this life.

My eyes are set on the stars,
So far some are, even beyond mars,
It inspire me even in wars,
That great men will prevail;

^^ This wasn't my favorite stanza simply because the flow gets kind of off here. All the other stanzas are free form and it looks like you're trying to put rhyming in here...

Every night fighting and shining greatly,
So incredible and wonderful,
God has given to us our souls inspire rs,
Reminding us of who we are;

^^ **"insipre rs" should be "inspirers" there's just a space there. Also, maybe try punctuating this stanza a little differently** I loved the imagery and praise in this simple little piece. lovely

Lately it brings me and lovely closely,
She watch the stars with me,
Those even beyond mars,
When we think of Gods work;

^^ **"closely" should be "close"...or at least that's how I think you meant by that. There should be a comma after "lately". "watch" should also be "watches"** Yet another sweet poem. it also shows the fellowship of believers..how we can watch the stars together and see His majesty together. which is a great thing.

Lovely poem...just fix those errors and it'll be amazing.

God bless,
Gabby