Cutting up My Words Before I speak

Nice. very good makes ya think about a lot of things ya know.

I wish i could write more then one line but theres really only a few words i can say those ryhmes are amazing and really deep emotionally based on real life events?

"I lay here muttering in my sleep
Thinking of only you;
Cutting up my words before I speak."

An effective introduction, really captures the essence of the poem in the first three lines, it also makes the reader want to read on. I liked the use of the title in the first stanza.

The form is nice, and easy to read, easy on the eyes too, I admire how you've done this :]

"Sucking out the unkown words from my lips
Drowning me in shame;
Waiting for your reality's eclipse."

Really bitter and well put together, 'reality's eclipse' was such a great metaphor to use!

"Not able to listen for reasons untold
My heart hurting;
Wings yearning to fly past the unkown"

Just a little typo 'unknown', but the repetition of it adds a mystery and dark feel to the poem, it's a twist as you've turned an angst ridden love poem into a dark and mysterious ballad.

I loved the ending too, it wasn't a typical sad ending, its like the character beleived in her/himself, really good work as usual, well done :]

(I'm awful at commenting peoples work, I'm sorry!)

Wanting you to see me for who I am, Unique.
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Angie I enjoyed this poem very much and yes your being unique does shine through so very brightly
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Waiting for your reality's eclipse.

Your choice of words were simply amazing , This was such a well expressed poem where you let your emotions flow so freely that although it was written in the depths of pain I felt such a beauty flow by your eloquent expressions . This is the first of yours I have read but I will surely be reading more

JIM---5/5