I really enjoyed reading this. it was nicely done.

Awsome rhyming in the poem.5/5
**harlea

Great poem! Awesome rhyming and not what I expected. The first line gives you an idea of what the poem is about, but it was way different than what I expected. I loved the ending!! Actually, I loved the whole thing! I'm adding it to my favs list. Great job. 6/5

Your better with ryhming then you think I believe. lol I can not write a story in to my poem that well at all. I have to be very general in my poems something that you never do so that makes it that more amazing

You are really good at writing you should keep up the good work :) and btw you are really good at rhyming i loved it :)
xx 5/5 bub

Wonderful poem, and strong word choice

Another amazing poem! You're seriously only 14? I can only imagine how good you'll be 10 years from now. this was flawless, a worthy 5.

I added you to my favorites. keep up the good work!