Unbearable

by LovedThenLost   Jul 5, 2008


When u left me i hit the ground so hard i could feel the world crashing in around me everytihng came to a stop and there was nothin at all left except for the pain and that was unbearable

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  • 16 years ago

    by Hollywood

    Umm I think it could honestly use work I mean it was good but you need to fix spellin capitolizing (I) and i think it could be more in deoth.I dont want to put you down in anyway i just want to see you grow! So i hope that we can see a little more work from you! And maybe make it a little longer