Comments : A Perfect Example of Imperfection.

  • 16 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    "Go ahead and judge me
    But think before you do
    Not everyone is perfect
    No, not even you"
    -Wow. This was powerful. You started off with an excellent first stanza. It's so true and perfect fitting!

    "I'm not going to let the world
    Decide where I'm going to go
    I'm going to hold my head high
    To be me; my only goal"
    -Wow. You have a very positive attitude.. I love that about you. :)

    "I may not have the prettiest smile
    The perfect money-bought face
    I don't want to be anorexic
    Because that's what T.V says is ideal weight"
    -Oh, so perfectly said. Celebrities must have the prettiest smile, the most beautiful face, skinny, and have good looks and such. You nailed that. Perfectly said and so true.

    "I am me, that's all I can be
    So tell me what else is wrong"
    -I love this! Wow, perfectly said.. yet again. You are just blowing me away with your optimism..!

    Wow, Perfect ending. Perfect. Perfect. Perfect. Very very positive poem.. I don't think this is really a sad poem. You are at least happy with who you are.. and don't care if people judge you. :) You seem to be going the right way in life. You are a very smart girl. Don't let people judge you! (: Great job. I loved thiss.. 5/5! *

  • 16 years ago

    by MR F R 3 S H

    Nice poem and no 1 is PERFECT and no 1 will be so u should just be u thiz iz a great poem 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Lil Ally Kat Xx In love xX

    100% true!!! I love this poem, its good!!! Its a great poem!!

  • 16 years ago

    by Ike Dizzle

    Awesome job. I like the meaning of this poem. Everyone tries to be perfect but no one is. You are only perfect by being imperfect and makin mistakes lol (if dat makes sense) Great job
    -vino

  • 16 years ago

    by khobo

    Amazing, you were able to keep the nice flow to it and stick to your point. Very nice. Love the truth to it.

  • 16 years ago

    by BREEawNUHH

    "Go ahead and judge me
    But think before you do
    Not everyone is perfect
    No, not even you"

    ^^ Wonderful opening stanza. It's bold, and honest.

    "I don't want to be another girl
    Brainwashed by T.V
    Don't want to be another girl
    Who thinks she's not good enough to be"

    ^^ I liked this, though I think maybe you should reword the third line so as not to repeat the first line. But even if you don't, it's still very good.

    "I'm the girl who comfortable
    In my clothes, body, and mind
    So go ahead and judge me
    Let's see what wrong you find"

    ^^ First line -- "I'm the girl who IS comfortable". This stanza is also very good. I like the honesty that is pouring from your words.

    "I'm not going to let the world
    Decide where I'm going to go
    I'm going to hold my head high
    To be me; my only goal"

    ^^ I love this. It's my favourite stanza. You're basically saying that you'll be who you are, and you won't change for anyone, regardless of what they think.

    "I may not be perfect
    And nor do I want to be
    But the only way you'll understand
    If if you just see me, for me"

    ^^ In the second line, I don't think the word "And" should be there. The fourth line, you have the word "if" twice.

    "I may not have the prettiest smile
    The perfect money-bought face
    I don't want to be anorexic
    Because that's what T.V says is ideal weight"

    ^^ I liked this a lot. I know I've been saying this, but the honesty in this piece is amazing.

    "I was not put on Earth to please you
    To be another Barbie clone
    I am me, that's all I can be
    So tell me what else is wrong"

    ^^ This is really well written. I liked this.

    "So go ahead and judge me
    But think before you do
    I'm happy with my imperfections
    But tell me girl, are you "

    ^^ The fourth line, should end with a question mark. Other than that, the ending is perfect.

    Overall; Between the amazing amount of honesty, well written words, and the meaning behind the piece, it's a fantastic poem.

    5/5

    -Briana

  • 16 years ago

    by Tangible heartache

    Wow, this is so true and I can't believe this is what girls do. I am young and a girl, but I dont think the answer to losing weight is to not eat. Who ever came up with that is just insane!!
    But I love this, and keep that poem in mind. Because one day you will have to face the question "Am i beautiful?" Yes, yes you are, everyone is; inside and out.
    So i hope you won't listen to others and keep your head high and be stubborn. No one can contral you, and no one should. Well love this peice of work, keep up the good work!!

    -Babygirl

  • 16 years ago

    by jay

    This was really good.
    i don't say that very often
    but your writing gave me goose bumps.