Well i would say that this is a poem and a very good, has alot of feeling in it. really love it .

Keep writing-

Tooo much cuts , in the pictures here, her are geting fragment of waht you feel

i think too short for a story to speak at loud for you even we can understand the feelings,

you say it is not a poem , but i beleve, feelings like this , that you do

you can easly make it one , if you want to speak the poem way the words will sjtu come out in their places

over all i will not vote now ,
i hope you do somthing more with it ,
take it out reform it and put it back

you felt bad , and we understadn , now ti si time to intesify this feeling and put it in it right content

*PS:nwo you can love me for ever and ever * lol