Who I Am {Contest}

by BREEawNUHH   Jul 6, 2008


I'm a simple girl,
and I'm easy to please.
I don't see my life as a loan,
I've done paid off my fees.

I've been through a lot,
shattered heart and all.
But I was given the strength,
so I can still walk tall.

I've had my share of the bad,
but also my share of the good.
I try my hardest in all that I do,
because I know that I should.

I can't fail unless I give up,
and I'm not that kind of girl.
My life is worth living,
I'm going to give it a whirl.

I'll make my dreams come true,
regardless of the obstacles in my way.
I'll keep walking down the road,
to a more successful day.

My dreams are big,
and I have determination.
I've told you who I am,
this is my explanation.

Briana Coulter
07/06/08

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  • 16 years ago

    by iris

    This is very well written, and i can see what you are saying. It flows wonderfully, and so very well done!
    You sound like you know exactly what you want, and strong enough to make those dreams happen, so good for you. Well done, take care luv Irisanne XxXxX

  • 16 years ago

    by Michelle18

    Wow i love it!!!!

    it has alot of confidence and made me smile.

    you remind me of myself in this poem. sometimes you gotta be strong and keep going no matter what comes along.

    "I've done paid off my fees."

    ^^in this line "i've done" seems wrong.. i think "i've already" sounds alot better.

    but other than that it was a great read. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Mister 47

    I am not sure this one is grammaticly sound
    I've done paid off my fees.
    maybe lakc of a comma

    but in over all , you talked a lot abnout your self every single reason and i am all understadnign and supporting why you should walk tall ,
    and never give up ,
    as a poem , it is great even some lines are not structured the same syllabus lenght

    in over all i loved this one becasue it make me forget these small error and focus on your essential : who you are
    :)
    great work

  • 16 years ago

    by RetroRavey

    I like it cuz it's an expression of you, but the rhyming sounds a bit forced. Other than that i really like it. Kepp it up. 5/5

    ~Ravey!

  • 16 years ago

    by sweet escape

    This poem shows a lot of determintion and it just the kind of poem that gives others the power to say i too can survive. it is very well writen and inspirational! great job. 5/5

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