Violent sea

by Izzie   Jul 7, 2008


When you struggle in life
it feels like the ocean
crashing waves over your head
forcing the putrid salt down your throat
with each grasping breath

weights bare down on your limbs
as you struggle to swim
to the sandy beach
as if the seaweed is pulling you deeper
to-wards the dark cold abyss

you can hear the sea creatures
mocking you with their gurgling
sounds just like laugher
under the water

no life jackets to save you
no boats to float by
you are under a glass blanket of waves
crystal clear to them
but a smoky film over your eyes

as your lungs scream for air
the tiniest rope is extended to you
to bad it slips through your fingers
like the sand in an hour glass

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  • 16 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    This is great, nice similes and imagery!

    "to bad it slips through your fingers"

    "to bad"- I don't think those are the best words to put there, just a little weird. Maybe change to:

    "But quickly it slips through your fingers"

    Just an opinon.....

    "like the sand in an hour glass"

    ^Nice ending line, really sums it up!