The Rush

by Lori   Jul 7, 2008


True love, so while I blush
Our two spirits rising through the rush
The rush, the only wall between our spree
There's nothing in our power to ever be free

It's your romantic words that I feed
I'm glued to the magic that's all around you
You shift my heart into hyperspeed
Too bad a war comes with what we got into

Although I'm happily in your trance
I'm completely hypnotized
I guess you're worth the chance
I can't say no to the power in your eyes

Here they go, here you come
As my brain turns into mush
What I've said to you is only the sum
Of what got stuck into the rush

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  • 16 years ago

    by LoreNz0

    A very good write, your skilled at conveying how u feel. i did however feel that the wording could have been improved slightly, and the change in rhyme scheme would hav been more effective with more structure. but definatly a good poem all the same.

  • 16 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    The poem is very lyrical and passionate

  • 16 years ago

    by Shellaine shelli

    A poem is seriously so much more than a rhyme scheme.
    as long as you are satisfied with the message portrayed in your poem then it doesn't matter what other people think or say.
    This poem was very different. and clearly showed how you fely at the time of writing it. keep it up

  • 16 years ago

    by Chelsea King

    Another great poem by a great author, keep up the good work!! 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    "Although I'm happily in your trance
    I'm completely hypnotized
    I guess you're worth the chance
    I can't say no to the power in your eyes"

    ^Completely cute stanza, written very well.
    Every line was so great and sweet, filled with so much feeling. Great job on this, I really loved it. Thanks for the comment! :)

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