Comments : Be Still ((And listen to the rain))

  • 16 years ago

    by BlueEyedMystery

    Oooh, Gabby. This poem actually made me feel like I was there. It was like I could almost hear the rain pouring down.

    ----------> The rain hums against a thin glass window,
    A sweet solitary sort of sound.
    Close your eyes and inhale deep,
    Feel the water all around.
    `` The imagry is just mind blowing in this stanza. I could see and hear the rain. I could even almost smell it. This was just wonderful.

    ----------> Run into the rain now, dear,
    With temple drenched, now close your eyes.
    All soaked in the purest way,
    To be a poet is to live and die.
    `` I like how you're engaging the reader in this stanza, it makes it even more real. That last line, I'm sure everyone on this site can relate to. It's one of those lines that gets stuck in your head and you can't get it out.

    ----------> Hush now the clacking computer keys,
    That spoke poems all night long.
    The rain hums sweet and soft, my dear,
    A gentle lullaby song.
    `` Oh man, this last stanza I know everyone can relate to too. I know I can. I like how you actually used typing the poems on the computer instead of writing them on paper. It's very true, even if people type them, they usually don't put that in their poem.

    I loved this poem so much! Great job! x]

    Keep writing!
    Cayce