I loved how you wrote this, and the beginning was so eye-catching. I enjoyed reading this, very interesting at the end how you want to buy back what you sold. Great write!

Just looking at the format if this poem is kind if overwhelming. I think if you broke it up into stanzas it'd be more appealing to the eye.

Also, you went from saying I, me, my to he, his, him. That really kind of threw me off. I think you should stick to the same point of veiw throughout the whole poem.

I reads more like a story than a poem, try to spice it up a bit with some metaphors, they always seem to catch people's attention.

Overall, I think it's a good peice, but could be improved. You told your life story clearly, and I think a lot of people could relate to this. All the struggles in life, and the choices, you captured well.

Well done.

Keep writing!

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