by Rachelle Jul 9, 2008
category :
Love, romance /
lost love
Bottled up inside |
I like it. Try to be less obvious with your rhymes though. Face and replace rhyme but it makes it obvious. Face and ways don't rhyme but they sound so much alike. It's a pseudo rhyme. |
That was definitely an incredible write! great structure, great flow, great emotion, great wording, and the tone was perfect 5/5 |
Aww, this was a very good poem, i loved the rhyming and flow of the poem. great job |
by Sora
A thoughtful and beautiful write. excellent flow and form. the first four lines were perfect, a great opener. keep writing you have great talent. 5/5. |
by PoetryKnight
Good poem, keep up the good work, got to go to work now, take luck. |