Comments : Trail of Kisses

  • 16 years ago

    by Dan Bloom

    I absolutely love this poem. It is so passionate! My girlfriend would love it too... I'll show it to her! :-p It's just like us haha

    I love how you used different types of kisses comparing them with different emotions and meanings... too many people just think there is only one type of kiss and it means the same thing every time. I'm glad it's not just me that feels they communicate much more than that haha

    Oh, the first stanza I would change. I have no idea how I would do it... its just a bit rough

    Sweet kisses
    Reminding me he loves me
    He thinks I'm beautiful
    That no flaws he does see

    ^^just the last like "That no flaws he does see" Thats a bit shaky. Other than that it's beautiful!

    Keep writing! 5/5

    -Danny

  • 16 years ago

    by Dan Bloom

    Oh and im adding it to my favorites too :) just FYI