I liked it. I thought that it showed someone's passion and hope in very few words.

I read a book called, 'The Kite Runner' a few weeks ago. This poem sort of reminded me of that book. Now, back to your poem - I thought that it was good, but not as great as it could have been. The emotion was there, but it was a bit too simple for my liking.

This is wonderful write... brilliantly portrayed... short straight and superb... i am really glad that you chose this subject to write on..

good word choice...

"Broken lives
Faded dreams"

^^ if only something could be done for all those innocent children on street...

"Why must our sons mistrust their own?
Fractured values
Shattered unity"

^^ so well described...

keep writing...

I thought this was really good. keep up the great work =)

I thought this was really great i loved it great job!

I liked this poem. deep and true. :]] xx 5/5

This is a very well written thought provoking poem I would not change a thing

I really liked that but those last
three lines caught my attention

Just look to the west, you can see
Peace
An eternity.

I Love that

Very short but it says all it needs to say, really brings an image of someone dreaming about what is out there beyond their boarders. keep writing and well done! loved it.

Jacs

Amazing...brilliant..and thoughtful !

5/5 very true...very sad ...

Wonderful poem , i love it alot
nice job 5/5