Comments : Snow storm

  • 16 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    This is really good, and I like your style too! It's cool how you started every line with an s too.

    "Shaped by angel hands,
    Showering the earth with blankets of white crystals,"

    ^I loved that line, so perfect!!

    "Sliding out of ice, the grass looks meek."

    ^That line just seems a bit weak for the ending.

    Maybe try this:

    "Sliding out of ice, the grass slowly appears.

    Or something like that, just an opinon.

    But still, I loved this a lot, so keep it up! :)