I loved your poem hun, you did a great job on it. <33

It's sooo good.
a very sad ending but it's good. =]
x x

You seem to have a gift of telling a story in rhyme. This poem not only flows well, but it's content is superb, I love the shocking twist at the end, sad, but evoking an emotion in the reader is a job well done!

Well done

Michael

Aww, its like the complete opposite to a fairy tale.. your relaly gud at making stuff rhym.

Great poem =)
Fantastic rhymes
Flows well
and a nice end

This is just, wow. Its very sad, but again, its another creative piece from you. It ends kind of unexpectidly, which is good. I liked this, is a good write. Nice job. xx 5/5

Woahh..
this one is great.
blew me away the first time i read it. :)
it flows and rhymes great.
i loved it..keep up the good work.. :D

Aww..you set me up. Lol I read the first stanza and was like why did dhe put this in the sad section...now I know. I really liked this. I love stories and poetry and you did a wonderful job of doing two in one. I love the flow, the style, the diction...I can go on for days. Very nice work my friend. Nik

Once upon a time
In a faraway land,
A princess sleeps
Cheek pressed to her hand.

^^This was the perfect stanza 4 this poem, i love how youve started the story off about her dream..

Of rainbows and dewdrops
of kittens and pups,
of happiness and laughter
and abundance of love

^^I think this was quite talented, how you managed to get the words 'pups' & 'love' into this stanza when ppl look at it they think thats not guna rhyme..
But it flows beautifully.

Of yellow dandilions
of autumn and spring,
of a jewel laden crown
of necklaces and rings.

^^This stanza.. i dnt no but it didnt seem to flow that well for me.

Once upon a time
In a faraway land,
a little girl sleeps
cheek pressed to her hand.

^^LOVE the way youve re-worded your starting stanza so that it fits the real story & not her dream..

Her dream floats away
as she nurses her scars,
ignoring grim headlights
from ongoing cars.

^^When i red this i knew strate away the bast to the story.. It so well-worded & flows so well, itd almost make you cry.

Her dream's her escape
Her hope and her light,
But this little princess
wont live through the night.

^^Awwwwww, this stanza was my favourite becuz it was so hart-felt, really up-setting. i loved how youve made the poem created a dramatic sadness.

I think "dream's" cud be ''dreams". it sits a little better.

*Hunny*

"wont" should be "won't".

"She's" should be "she's".

Otherwise, the whole idea of this piece was well-thought out and the style was intriguing, I could have read more and more. I really enjoyed the images you gave that she was constructing, great rhyming and the descriptions were magnificint! I really don't have any more suggestions, the last line was sad and left the reader with sadness in their hearts.

Well worth the read, one of my favorites by you so far :)

Take care and God bless!

~MaryAnne