Sacrifice

It was good and no i dont know if english is your first language or not and i dont care i liked the choppy flow in the words it sort of emphasized the feeling and i am well acquainted with this feeling so i like it but not only cuz i can relate but it was really good!!

This was sort of hard for me to understand. I really didnt get the message that you were trying to put out. But the flow was okay. But to be honest, I think that this one needs a lot of work. But keep writing. You are very talented.

This was okay. The rhyme was simple and flowed well. Keep working at it. Nik

I think you could find a better rhyme for fault other than default , otherwise it has an okay flow and the other rhymes are great . I like the last line , it seems to end it very powerfully . 4/5

You have a talent for getting a lot of deep mystery in a few lines as this poem reflects