Invaluable Stranger.

Very intense writing as always. Lines are very strong and passionate.

'Unleash these feminine urges,
They were designed for your contentment,
Unfold these treasured thoughts,
And see before your absolute completion. '

This one the best stanza to me. It ends the poem perfectly.

Very profound writing. Fantastic write. It has some grace. Well done.

But my only 'critique' would be... Some lines of this poem are too long. And somehow seem mismatch to other lines as far as the construction of the line concerned. Specially one of the stanza just before the ending one has too long lines. But this is just my thought.

The whole poem is very good. very graceful... intense... sensual... fantastic!

Natalie,

this is another beautifully expressed poem from you. Your words are always so intense that they stir the very core of me. The depth of your work is totally inspiring as is your character. I will now read very carefully through your poem once more..

Unspoken words blur between these lines.
Unnecessary utterances pronounce feelings.
Secretly seductive you entice my curiosity,
I yearn to unfold the layers hiding your soul,
And to be faced by the core of your essence.
^reading betwwen the lines. How true this is in many converstions, there is often more unsaid than said. Only those who truly listen hear those unspoken words. Those silent cues often signify a profound message.

Unknown to this strong mind, you have entered irreversibly,
Your place within has long before been established. Defined.
These softest words you gently utter linger within timelessly,
Enabling the catalyst for these chemically composed feelings.
^Once love has been exchanged, a heart has been commited. I like the way you use defined, singling this word to elevated the word, love, commited and with no easy way out. Trapped, but willingly tethered! Chemically composed feelings - this is such a unique, almost clinical way of describing a love poem. Great!

Unable to demonstrate these affections physically,
Must these lips forever crave the graze of your skin?
Cursed to imagine infinitely the feel of your caress!
Insufferable distance obscures my mind's yearnings.
^This stanza is beautifully written. Sadness is etched within this, as the yearning to be more than images allow. The line - Must these lips.. is pure poetry! You have described this in such vivid clarity. I can imagine the softness of those lips, gently 'grazing' my skin. Wow!! :)

Undying desires replaying determinedly within this mind, no cessation.
Anticipating that ultimately these feelings will translate to physicality,
Allows me to envision my palms traveling the definitions of your body,
Respecting and appreciating every curvature, by God himself bestowed.
^The hope and desire within this is clearly laid out. It lifts you up and takes you to a happy place where dreams can come true. This stanza is almost like a daydream spilt out onto parchment for all eternity.

Unleash these feminine urges,
They were designed for your contentment,
Unfold these treasured thoughts,
And see before your absolute completion.
^Such a powerful ending. I think in this you speak these unspoken words, laying out your hearts message clearly.

I have thoroughly enjoyed this from start to finish. :):):)

Michael xxx

Love it! This is very nicely written. Brings love to physicality in a relationship unlike most poets do on this website. They are always like "I love you and want you in bed! Oh, baby I wanna @#$%..." and so on. I hate that haha

Great write! I think there might be some punctuation errors a few places but overall it deserves a five. Thanks for writing it :)