AWESOME!!
5/5

Wow. very strong poem. 5/5. keep it up. ~KM~

The rhymes were sort of choppy but it had good structure overall.

Where to go in this life of hell
You're telling me that I'm supposed to be happy with what i got
Then I'm telling you that I'm not happy
And u can't change that no matter what u say
^^^^
the third line was strangely placed. but it makes sense what you wrote.

I'm here and i can't change that
you don't know half the things I've been through
I look around and all i see
Is me coming in second best
^^^
I like it how you try to put your perspective in the person's eyes, but still not really telling them what's going on.

The harder I try to make myself happy
The more I fall
I don't wanna be like this
and i don't wanna have an attitude
^^^
I felt emotion in the first and second line. It was really powerful. And the lines had a lot of meaning.

But i can't help myself
I feel that the more and more i work
to make myself better
the more and more criticism i get
^^^
I feel like this is an understanding stanza ((if that makes any sense)) that you are trying to get them to understand why you can't get better even when you really do try.

I hate this
so don't tell me ever again
that i should be happy with what i got
caz u don't know the half of me!
^^^
Kind of a weird ending. but it was powerful i liked the emotion in the last 3 lines.

**Until I Die**