Oh wow I liked this poem a lot. You worded everything so perfectly that it had a touch of imagery to it. and I could almost imagine it all so perfectly. Great flow as well & rhyme.. Great job, 5/5.

A nice write! I would like to see a little better metre.
I enjoyed the initial structure of this and think it would be great if it were all structured like the first stanza and the last three lines of the second and third stanzas(not sure how but it is possible). This in turn would smooth the rhythm.
As always an opinion.

Humm good work nicley writen , but i did not know waht you are talkign about

good rhyming and soo on but i would feel strange in feelings you know i can not critic the structure but ui might attack the feelings it gave me
make me little sad and lost and tired

i dont know if that it ment to be

soo 5\5