I am very impressed here specialy the last line you askl him to see an invisible things in you

you knwo somtiems i can read screams in the eyes
i would read million line from my girl that no word can she would never say !!
i can see over her mask even she try to make it invisible
:)

This is a poem I can really relate to and it is so true. You have emphasised emotion. Excellent structure!
5/5

~Chins~
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I love the honesty and truth..
and the last line, asking someone to see the invisble-ness.
good work.

Beautiful write, but very sad.. most people feel alone, even in a crowd, but they just need to find themselves. :) Good work. 5/5

Very heart felt poem; you really packed in the emotion right until the end. I can relate in a way and I really like this poem. Keep writing 5/5 =]