by Poet on the Piano Jul 12, 2008
category :
Life, society /
inspirational
I still make a lot of mistakes, |
by Kimberley
Omgoodness! love it! it is so inspiring, and love the format and flow. keep it up! KM |
It's good thinking for someone your age but remember this piece of advice: Don't use too many I's to show your narrating a first person poem, all you do is continueally tell the reader over and over again that the narrator is speaking form their point of view and eventually people will get tired of it, or you will have people that will say it's good even though they may not even like it. Always back up your point with a metaphor or imagery, instead of explaining in the next line why you said something in the line before it. |
by Katie
This one is very inspiring. i love how it flows together and the words fit very well. keep it up!! |
by Stephanie
Wow....i liked it....i find it very inspirational |
You did an amazing on this. i really enjoyed reading this. the flow was good, and the message was clear throughout. this was very inspirational. i loved it. |