I really really like this. I remember reading it a while ago...I HELPED YOU WRITE THIS!!

Well great job. I'd give it a 10 out of 5 if I could.

This is great, really. I love the imagery and the word choice. All of it conveys a super powerful image and for that, great job. :)

The sun throws a darkened shadow,
deep throughout a shady lie,
over cloudy painted landscapes,
that forbids a seldom bird to fly.

^^ This was definitely my favorite stanza because i could visualize it. The scene is powerful and blank, but absolutely stunning. "painted landscapes" is a beautiful description.

that forbids a seldom bird to fly.

^^ this line didn't make sense to me, grammatically...a seldom bird..you've used seldom as an adjective here. and i don't know if you did that intentionally or not. but it stood out to me, so i thought i'd let you know..

overall, great job. ^.^