Teach Her A Lesson

by BREEawNUHH   Jul 13, 2008


Shattered hearts and blood red tears
you contemplate your deepest fears.
Cut up wrists and empty pill bottles
you're ending it all, going full throttle.

She took it all with her when she left you
now you're not sure what else you can do.
You've written your note and it's right there
you can't help but think that this wasn't fair.

It's tearing you apart from the inside out
you're gonna end your life, there is no doubt.
"What did I ever do to get this in return?"
this will teach her a lesson she hasn't learned.

You've been holding on for too long already
you hold the blade but your hand is unsteady.
"Don't worry, for it will all be over soon", you say
"tomorrow will just be another normal day".

The vein has been cut and the blood is flowing
they would be disgusted by the way you were going.
You smile because you know you won't be alone anymore
you continue to bleed as your life ends on the floor.

Briana Coulter
07/13/08

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  • 15 years ago

    by Faithless

    You got me captivated with your 1st line.This poem was indeed beautifully crafted into a sad poem. I must say that the choice of wrds that you used such as throttle really brings the poetry to life. I also like the idea that you insert the thoughts of the protagonist's mind into the poem. It just create this intense moment while you're reading it further.
    I have to say that i absolutely love this poem

    Excellent job
    5/5 from me

  • 16 years ago

    by Blah Blah Blahhhh

    Well...my opinion...u did a very well puttin it in words. yes it kan be common. But its the wordin and the way that certain people kan put things...certain people kan put it in very different ways but it depends wut kind of situation u r tryin to describe...i dnt kare wut the others say either i like thz piece. U knew how to express it and how to put the wordin...alot of people have a hard time puttin things in words. But i understood wut u ment...and i dnt agree to much with suicide..yes life kan be too much to handle sometimes but it kan get better and u shouldnt just give up..anyways nice piece :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Blah Blah Blahhhh

    Well...my opinion...u did a very well puttin it in words. yes it kan be common. But its the wordin and the way that certain people kan put things...certain people kan put it in very different ways but it depends wut kind off situation u r tryin to describe...i dnt kare wut the others say either i like thz piece. U knew how to express it and how to put the wordin...alot of people have a hard time puttin things in words. But i understood wut u ment...and i dnt agree to much with suicide..yes life kan be too much to handle sometimes but it kan get better and u shouldnt just give up..anyways nice piece :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    Well, it looks like a lot of people are saying it's a common poem.. but theres's always that one thing that makes a poem better than all the others. I think you did a excellent job with your word choice here and you kept my attentino throughout the whole poem... so I can't say it's a bad poem at all. Just because it's about cutting/suicide/ and such... and is such a common topic around this site to write about, I can't downvote it. It's a wonderful poem and I think you made it your own in a way. 5/5 {{Sorry, if I made no sense. :)}}

  • 16 years ago

    by Bugg

    I don't care what others have said, I truly like this poem. Yeah, this subject has been written about many times, but each person brings their own voice to each poem and that's what makes each one different. Suicide is a touchy subject for me, because I lost someone very close to me to suicide and it was because of something I did. So, this poem is special to me. I'm adding it to my favorites.

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