As far as I could see, this poem had no flaws at all. The rhyme was consistant. The flow was smooth and helped the poem flow very nicely. The word-choice was excellent. The poem all together was very unique in it's own way. It was a interesting piece to read, IMO. Great write. Good luck with the contest!! 5/5. Keep writing.

Wow.. this is an impressive poem. i really enjoyed reading it because it flowed nicely .. theres only one thing i see wrong...

"We've heard her voice whisper as the wind."

^^i think you meant to put "in" instead of "as" ..

other than that excellent job.5/5

Imao, the flow was smooth, as was the word choice. Seems un-cliched, which is always good. An interesting write.

"We have beheld her as a sensual mother,
Desiring her many pleasures as no other
She shall weep tender tears sadly forlorn.
Yet, from her dark shadow the dawn was born."

^^ This is a beautifully written stanza. I feel it draws the reader in. Your word choice is excellent.

"We've heard her voice whisper in the wind.
Her immoral spirit eternally will not rescind.
Nor, her fragrant fruit conceived of the divine
As many a mortal man has tasted her wine"

^^ Another beautifully written stanza. Again, your choice of words does not disappoint.

"What of the poets that attempt to capture
With rhythm and rhyme heavenly rapture
Only to fall madly and vainly to the earth
In hopes that their words inspire rebirth"

^^ This is my favourite stanza in this piece. The images become more and more visible with every word I read.

"In a world of hurt this planet of desire,
Is searching for a song of passionate fire
Turning from the bright sun for the night viewing
Of the twinkling stars in a wide world of wooing"

^^ This was a very good ending stanza. I feel as though it brought the piece to a close perfectly.

Overall; I loved your choice of words, and the rhymes were beautiful. There is not a thing about this piece that I disliked. It was perfect.

5/5

``Briana

This was so beautiful. As you probably know, I don't read poems to point out what's wrong or criticize them (though I'm sure most people would want that), I read them for enjoyment and emotion and to get to know the poet through the words they write. I found this poem to be amazingly perfect.

'What of the poets that attempt to capture
With rhythm and rhyme heavenly rapture
Only to fall madly and vainly to the earth
In hopes that their words inspire rebirth'

Very good lines to make a very good stanza. A thoughtful creation. All of all it's a fantastic poem.

Beautiful poem.I love how all your poems are written.The word choice is always fabulous and they always keep my attention.5/5

---amber---

Beautiful poem.I love how all your poems are written.The word choice is always fabulous and they always keep my attention.5/5

---amber---

Beautiful poem.I love how all your poems are written.The word choice is always fabulous and they always keep my attention.5/5

---amber---

We have beheld her as a sensual mother,
Desiring her many pleasures as no other
She shall weep tender tears sadly forlorn.
Yet, from her dark shadow the dawn was born.

^^ This capturd me right away. It was a very beautiful 1st stanza.

We've heard her voice whisper in the wind.
Her immoral spirit eternally will not rescind.
Nor, her fragrant fruit conceived of the divine
As many a mortal man has tasted her wine

^^ Agian, beautiful. Describing Mother Earth as you do, it strikes a chord with me here.

What of the poets that attempt to capture
With rhythm and rhyme heavenly rapture
Only to fall madly and vainly to the earth
In hopes that their words inspire rebirth

^^ You words inspire more than rebirth here. This stanza was very deep.

In a world of hurt this planet of desire,
Is searching for a song of passionate fire
Turning from the bright sun for the night viewing
Of the twinkling stars in a wide world of wooing

^^ Perfect ending, to a perfect poem.

5/5